Friday, July 23, 2010
Fate...
The bed stood against the wall, beneath the window through which we watched the stars--the snow falling softly in the night. Sheets still crumpled and smelling of our final love. His scent lingered on the pillow where I laid my head, mingling with salty tears that fell. How could this have happened? Our love was to last forever. What fate had brought me here? The sheets were warmer not so long ago as we lay tangled in their midst. While dreams were spoken and plans were made. Oh, Fate, you angry bitch, how could you take him? What would I do without his touch, his kiss, his love?
C Hummel Kornell
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Fate is a cruel "other woman"! You have revived the classical lost love in a very unique way..nicely done!
ReplyDeleteLost love is always sad and as sounbdoffreedom said, classical. If you live long enough and stay open to love, it finds you again and fate wears a kinder face! :-)
ReplyDeleteYou have described this scene which so many have experienced very well .....
ReplyDeleteA sense of loss so neatly captured in so few words. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteI sincerely hope this story was a story and not bitter experience. To judge by what you say in your profile, you are a long way away from being deserted. Hope fate stays kind to you.
ReplyDeleteYou know, I really like this. Writing that can be blunt and poetic at the same time is far too uncommon these days.
ReplyDeleteBravo.
Well done- how will we survive losing to fate?
ReplyDeletenothing last forever...
ReplyDeletepoignant Magpie
Very touching and real. A superb Magpie!
ReplyDeleteDear Connie,
ReplyDeleteLove is the most powerful memory of all. And captured here so poignantly.
In a few sentences and in a tiny place(bed), you've included the major themes of life: man, woman, Love, Loss (by betrayal or death).
ReplyDeleteThis passage reveals your great gift in telling a story.
Simply put but great resonance. I'm a widow and clearly feel like this often. Very succinct and heartfelt.
ReplyDeleteRealistic! Wow---you've been through a lot. I'm glad both of us found wonderful, loving men! Thank you for this and for your kind words on my Magpie.
ReplyDeleteThe old story..very well told..and yet we try again...Thanks!
ReplyDeleterefreshing tale.
ReplyDeleteloved your style.
Love, gone cold,
ReplyDeleteA mere scent on linen.
Fate takes from us in many ways, bringing forth many emotions. Anger, sadness, despair. You put them into words that paint a picture.
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