Sunday, March 3, 2013

Drowning...

MagPie 158 (Photo prompt courtesy Tess Kincaid)


Heavy aching heart
Life ebbing too soon
Chest exploding with the effort not to breath
Lungs expanded with their final air

No way out!

Acceptance dawns,  the body responds
Bubbles rise; the end is near
A liquid breath and you are here...

Original copyrighted material of C Hummel Kornell



Posted by CHummelKornell at 8:16 AM

14 comments:

  1. UnknownMarch 3, 2013 at 8:34 AM

    Nicely done.

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  2. Kathe W.March 3, 2013 at 9:32 AM

    powerful words- I really like the last line.

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    1. CHummelKornellMarch 4, 2013 at 9:08 AM

      Thanks, Kathe, I have always had a fear of drowning and this prompt reminded me of that fear.

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  3. Theresa MilsteinMarch 3, 2013 at 10:53 AM

    I wonder if the person is saved or sees someone on the other side.

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  4. BerowneMarch 3, 2013 at 12:11 PM

    Intriguing and rather moving...

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  5. Tess KincaidMarch 3, 2013 at 3:35 PM

    Chilling description...nice to see you back at Magpie C...

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    1. CHummelKornellMarch 4, 2013 at 9:09 AM

      Tess, I miss you all when I'm absent but I was productive while away. Submitted a novel to HQN!

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  6. ninotazizMarch 3, 2013 at 6:33 PM

    Giving up to liquid breath. How scary....

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    1. CHummelKornellMarch 4, 2013 at 9:10 AM

      One of my greatest fears, drowning. Perhaps due to the fact that I have asthma?

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  7. Silent Otto March 5, 2013 at 4:26 PM

    Like being reborn , thanks

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  8. ~T~March 7, 2013 at 9:49 AM

    So vivid, I'm afraid to breathe, too!

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